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Ketamine Hourglass

Lies, plastic and sharp
Wrought around a pale complexion
Just the way he speaks it, enough to gag a maggot
The soft crisp turns of his tongue
Such a bitter excuse lain bare
Ever watching as the skin peels forth, floating into space from his once soft complexion
This self destruction brings forth the serenity
Only found inside the fragments of a once vibrant heart
As the world melts away, one vowel at a time

The piano cords ring out with each gentle touch of his finger
A skill he began for her, only half found now
Still, the echoes of violin parody and giggles lay strong
Fog to an ever stumbling thought, never to pass or fade
Like an unchanging streetlight, in an intersection plagued with people
Disgusting creatures of filth, like a bottle of tonic, filled with vomit and sold at full price
He still melts inside

The stars grow old, dimming in the brightening night
A soft purple overlay settles with every blinking eye
Another night passed into day before a sleep deprived eye
Tears cleaning lines through settling dirt and dust, swollen cheeks and red noses
Eyes, still dry and cracking
He grips the grass as the last stars fade into the sky
His souls rose and departed with each violent tremble no one saw
Whispered lies, to save oneself, as he wanders aimlessly drunk on regret

The streets… never seemed so long as they do this morning
As I stumble down them, ever dip and crack an obstacle for clumsy feet
Shadowed and fine, simple hands stroke, exaggerated
Place the mask over my face, nonchalant as I brush my hair back
Finger tip swirls and one last sob, knowing shed be doing that right now
The day rises and the hours pass, not but a mile from where the crimson chains of past
Melt solemnly away with the lake fronts gentle tides.
Take me away from here, in the hours I can’t forget you
Ketamine Hourglass

IS MY WRITERS BLOCK OVER !!!!!!!!! You tell me :aww:
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GirlJackTheRipper Featured By Owner May 30, 2008
Not my favorite by you - But mayhaps that's just because I'm not really absorbing this one like I feel that I should. The main lines that speak to me are these: "The streets… never seemed so long as they do this morning
As I stumble down them, ever dip and crack an obstacle for clumsy feet
Shadowed and fine, simple hands stroke, exaggerated
Place the mask over my face, nonchalant as I brush my hair back"

I like the language? (I think that's the word I want) though.


Aww. . .I'm so sorry. I promised you an awesome comment. I'll come back to this one after a cig, k? I just gotta let this one sink in. I'm outta practice.
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Cojjinsecrets Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2011
3 years later >_> loooooooooooooooong cig XD *doesthepoutydancethenfallsonthefloorlauighing*
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GirlJackTheRipper Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2011
Haha, long enough for me to quit smoking twice!!
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Cojjinsecrets Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011
HAHAHAHA, Epic fail. I still want that damn comment :shakefist:
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XCyanideDreamsX Featured By Owner May 17, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
*bows down* holy poop on a stick. i dont know what else to say. Kaeldra pretty much summed it up for me.
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ninuq1 Featured By Owner May 16, 2008
wow that really good! i luv it!
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Cojjinsecrets Featured By Owner May 16, 2008
Thank you :aww:
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Heavynova Featured By Owner May 16, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
Hahaha Ketamine Hourglass. I like it.

I never really have anything worthy to say about your songs and poetry, so I wont. But I think your block may be gone now :)
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FrightDelight Featured By Owner May 16, 2008   Photographer
:wow: holy shit.........that must have taken some thought :omg: i loved it kitteh
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Kaeldra-1 Featured By Owner May 16, 2008
Nice. i like the transition in the last stanza from third to first person. Some really gorgeous lines in there....like...
The piano cords ring out with each gentle touch of his finger
A skill he began for her, only half found now
Still, the echoes of violin parody and giggles lay strong
Fog to an ever stumbling thought, never to pass or fade
I love that.
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